I loved your word choice and sentence fluency! I loved how you used the adverb for the verb. Also your pronoun is awesome. The formatting in perfect as well!
Great story. Loved the climax. Could use some revision on word choice and just a touch more paragraphs.
I loved your word choice and sentence fluency! I loved how you used the adverb for the verb. Also your pronoun is awesome. The formatting in perfect as well!
ReplyDeleteGreat story. Loved the climax. Could use some revision on word choice and just a touch more paragraphs.
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